bec中级写作范文

bec中级写作范文篇一

BEC中级写作.

样 题 BEC中级写作PartOne样题实例解析(上)

You are the Managing Director of a company whose profits have recently increased and you would like to reward staff for this.

题目解读

BEC中级写作考试总时长为45分钟，根据词数要求和分值，通常小作文写作不超过15 Write a memo to all staff: Thanking them for their contribution Explaining why profits increased Telling them what their reward will be. Write 40~50 words

应试创作可分成以下三步：1．审题构思Read & Plan (3 mins)；2．写作Write (10 mins)； 分钟。

3．检查Check (2 mins)。 Part One的题目背景通常是一事、两人、三要点。本题中，最近公司利润增长，"你"作

备忘录的内容需包 为公司的董事总经理(Managing Director)将对全体员工(all staff)进行奖励，

括三个要点：感谢员工的贡献，解释利润增长原因，并告之奖励内容。正文词数要求为40～ 50个词，因为商务英语要求简洁，词数要求有上限，这和四、六级以及考研写作只规定词数

（一）内容 下限有所区别，但实际考试时允许少量超标，比如接近60词。 BEC中级写作PartOne样题实例解析(上) 内容、结构、语言和形式

首先可根据各要点的逻辑关系调整写作顺序，比如在本题中，先解释利润增长的原因， 再感谢员工，最后宣布奖励。其次应针对要点简要展开论述，比如利润增长的原因可能是销

售量增加(the increase of sales)、成本降低(the reduction of cost)或推出新产品(the 资(an increase of salary)或发放奖金(bonus)。要点扩展应注意两点：其一，商务交流 要求具体，比如利润的增长比去年同时段增加10%；其二，扩展内容应符合商务实际，如全体员工工资上浮50%、增加带薪假期(paid leave)、开派对(a party)或唱卡拉launch of the new product)；而奖励的内容经常是集体旅行(a company trip)、涨工 OK(Karaoke)等奖励都是不符合商务实际的。如果确实对商务实务不熟悉，可用简单的理 work and long working hours)。

（二）结构

因为文章内容很少，总词数只有50个词左右，写作时应写成一个整体，不应出现每句一段的散文诗文章，而且不要刻意使用first和second之类的过渡词语。 由以避免出错，比如公司业绩增长的原因可以宽泛地写成是员工的努力工作和加班(hard

（三）语言

Part One题目中的要点通常以三个现在分词形式给出，写作时通常是三句话，即针对每个现在分词写一句话，平均句长在15个词左右。备考时应针对题目中常见的分词动词准 备相应的表达方式，尽量避免重复使用题目中的词句即可。比如，

解释原因：

连词：because, since, for, so；短语：because of, due to, owing to 表示感谢： Thank you very much for...; I would like to thank you for...; I am very grateful for...; It was very kind of you to ... 奖励： A rise in salary of X%; A bonus of X% of your monthly salary; A trip to Hawaii/Athens/Maldives

需要注意的是，商务英语要求正式文体，较之非正式文体，其有以下常见特点：

正式 非正式

Headquarters, September (不简写) H.Q. Sept. (缩写) schedule, discuss (精确动词) set, talk about (宽泛动词或词组) A copy has been sent. (被动语态) I sent you a copy. (主动语态)

BEC中级写作PartOne样题实例解析(下)

形式

最后需要考虑的就是备忘录的形式。正式考试时，文字题目下方会模拟商务实际，附上备忘录开头片段，包括To, From, Date, Subject等细节，但是考生不必直接在片段后书 写，应该在试题纸背面写作，写作时不要求必须有From, To等内容，但若能准确而符合商 事项。

务习惯地写出备忘录细节，无疑会增加文章的印象分，这里简单介绍一下备忘录细节的注意 To: 备忘录对象 如果具体到人，最好写出全名，不要写自己的真实姓名，有作弊嫌疑，尤其不能"重名"，如Bill Tom，Bill和Tom都是名(Given name)，而不是姓(Family name)，一个简单的处理方法就是use others?name，比如男名Bill Gates, Michael Scofield, Jay Chou 或女名

From: 备忘录作者 要点同上，一般不用尊称，只有对方不知道自己身份的时候才后缀职位名称。 Date: 日期 BEC属于英联邦国家的考试，日期的写法一般为日、月、年，比如7 December 2002，{bec中级写作范文}.

注意月份用英文而不是数字，以免和日期混淆，可以缩写，比如将一月写作Jan(也可以用 开放标点)。

Britney Spears, Jennifer Aniston等；若显示关系亲密，还可以把名字缩写，比如 B. Gates, M. Scofield, J. Chou, B. Spears, J. Aniston等；如果写给上级，还应该加 上尊称甚至职位，比如Mr. Bill Gates - Managing Director, Mr. Jay Chou - Art Director等；现代商务写作中流行开放标点(Open Punctuation)，即标点不影响理解的时候可以不

Mr./Ms./Mrs.后面的省略点也可以省去，简单写成Mr/Ms/Mrs；最好不要省去 用，所以

名字。

范文示例

To: All Staff From: Bill Gates Date: 7 December 2002 Subject: Staff Reward The profits of our company this month went up 10% compared with the same period last year, due to your hard work and long working hours. I would like to thank you for your long devoted service. A trip to Hawaii has been

BEC 2和BEC3的写作部分里所要求写的文章，从体裁（Genre）上来讲都是说明文（Expository）。而在一篇说明文里，通常一个典型段落一般只能表达一个独立完整的观点。所谓独立完整的含义是指段落里所提出的观点应该是有逻辑判断的，并且是有细节支持的。所以在BEC写作中,或者在一般的英文的说明文写作中，段落是我们表达一个独立完整观点的最小单位。 arranged next month as a prize. Enjoy! BEC写作段落表达四大基本要点

为了使得我们的段落在表达思想方面有效，通常对段落有四个方面的要求：第一，如上所述，一个段落只能讲述一个主题，即统一性；第二，段落应该讲述作者关于此主题所要讲述的全部内容；第三，段落应该有一个易于被读者所读懂的展开顺序；第四，段落中的句子应该是紧密地衔接在一起的。这就是著名英语语言专家James M.McCrimmon(Florida State University 1976)对于段落的写作所提出的基本要求，即"unity（统一性），completeness（完整性）,order（条理性）,and coherence（连贯性）。" 连贯性即语篇的衔接问题，这是写商务文章最基本要求，不要思维跳跃，想到哪写到哪，在此不再赘述。 统一性的含义是显而易见的。它要求我们写出的段落要紧紧的围绕一个主题来进行写作。应该注意的是，我们在写一个段落并试图通过这个段落来表达我们的某个观点的过程，永远是一个自问自答的过程。我们首先提出一个逻辑命题，然后用为人们所了解的细节来支持这个命题。我们可以想像，在读者刚刚读到我们的这个逻辑判断时，不禁要问"为什么"。一个优秀的作者，永远是在读者们问到"为什么"之前，就回答了自己提出的命题。有时候，我们的段落写得莫名其妙，就是因为我们自己提出了一个命题而自己没有回答。而另一个方面，一个段落只可以也最多只能表达一个命题。否则，阅卷的老师会认为作者有逻辑问题，思路不清晰。会认为我们在说明一个观点时，加入了一些不相关联的东西，从而干扰了读者对该观点的理解，于是该段落在表达观点时是没有效率的。 完整性的要求是相对的。一个观点到底需要多少阐述是视读者的需要而定的，这从很大程度上取决于作者的主观判断。而作者的主观判断又是取决于作者对该观点的理解以及对读者需要的理解。阐述过少当然会妨碍读者的理解，过多则会显得罗嗦。而且前者肯定会比后者问题更大。我们来看一段落。 As is known to all, in our routine work we are very often exposed to new technology. For instance, we need to use new computer software, such as Oracle and statistical tools; manipulate the latest multimedia player to demonstrate information and apply different and effective measures by which we communicate. On all these occasions, a good command of new technology

bec中级写作范文篇二

BEC中级大作文

大作文真题一: 题目讲解及范文

首先我们来看商务报告的写作要求：

◇You work in the Customer Services Department of a mail-order company. You have been asked to prepare a short report for your line manager about complaints. ◇Look at the information below, on which you have already made some handwritten notes.

◇Then, using all your handwritten notes, write your report.

◇Write 120~140 words.

题目解读

根据商务信函中提到的“1事2人1材料5要点”提示信息归纳，我们可分析出该题中的“1事”为报告顾客投诉情况；“2人”：“你”是邮购公司客服部的员工，阅读者是“你”的顶头上司，即line manager，直译为“直线经理”；“1材料”是1月至3月的顾客投诉统计图表和对三个月投诉原因的百分比分析。

内容与形式

内容方面，商务报告强调材料和手写要点缺一不可，比如报告中应当包括图表数据变化的特征，如2月投诉锐增，3月投诉减少，对应的手写要点１和２是对图表数据变化原因的分析，如2月投诉锐增是因为计算机系统崩溃，而3月投诉减少的原因是引入新的订货系统。又如报告中应提到顾客抱怨的主要原因是投递时间过长，占总投诉的56%，而要点3、4和5是提出减少投诉的方法，如

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月误投的减少；降低投递时间，内容可展开为增加投递员工或者更好地划分投递区域等；改进所投递产品的质量，重新选择产品生产公司等，这里需要一定的商务背景知识。其实读者不难发现，BEC写作题目体现了提出问题、分析问题、解决问题的思路，在潜移默化地传递着解决商业实际问题的思考过程。

形式方面，商务报告一般需要标题，本题可采用Report on Customer Complaints (2002 Jan.～Mar.)作为标题。主体部分通常采用大写的小标题理清结构：介绍(INTRODUCTION)，概括写报告的目的，比如汇报顾客投诉情况，分析原因，并提出解决办法。发现(FINDINGS)，发现部分应根据内容进行分段，比如按照月份投诉情况和三个月投诉原因分析分成两大部分：首先概括图表特征，包括１和２两个要点，接下来整体分析1月到3月投诉原因的百分比并提出解决办法，包括３、４和５三个要点。段落内部也可以采用商业报告中常用的项目符号标记要点。结论(CONCLUSIONS)，对投诉情况和解决办法进行概括，比如针对顾客投诉问题，已经采取了有效的对策。

范文：

Report on Customer Complaints (2002 Jan.～Mar.)

INTRODUCTION

This report has the purpose of presenting the reasons for customer complaints in 2002.

FINDINGS

The customer complaints received in 2002 were 300 in January. Then they increased to 540 in February because of the computer system’s breakdown. In March they fell to 230 because an improved order system was introduced.

The reasons for complaints from January to March were analyzed:

●First, the company received complaints for incorrect orders delivered. Such errors were fewer in March.

●Second, the delivering time is too long, and the company has planned to recruit new agents.

●Finally, customers complained about the poor product quality. In order to solve this problem more quality controls have been introduced.

CONCLUSIONS

At the moment not all the customers are satisfied but some measures have been taken to improve their satisfaction.

bec中级写作范文篇三

BEC剑桥商务英语中级作文模板、例题超全解析{bec中级写作范文}.

BEC中级作文模板、例题超全解析 题型： 1．商务便条类； 2．商务便函类；3．商务书信类；4. 商务报告类

注意：BEC不是单纯的英语考试，也不是考察商务知识。

对策：学习、模仿高水平的论文

例题解析：

 You work for a company which produces laser printers．You are visiting another company，Softcell, to buy some computer software for your department．They have expressed an interest in your company‘s printers and you would like to take twenty brochures and three sample printers with you．

相关词汇：laser, inkjet, projector (Barco), photocopier (Xerox), fax machine, scanner, computer, monitor

相关词汇：company literature; brochure; leaflet; flyer; white book; data sheet; prospectus

 Write a short note to Mr. Jim Asano，the Sales Manager．

 Asking for his permission to take these items．

 Explaining why you want them．

 Mentioning the time and date when you want to collect them．

Write 40-50 words on your Answer Sheet.

商务书信类

这一题型要求考生根据所提供的短文，如书信、传真、便函、留言条(电话留言条)等，起草一封书信，字数要求达到120—140词左右。

题目结构：

Input: 1 situation description

2 task

3 target reader

Reading: texts in note, letter, fax, memo + content points (handwritten notes; second letter)

Write: business letter (120-140 words)

注意英美拼写问题

【例题】

 You have organised a production conference for your company which will be held on 10 October 2005. The following is the letter of confirmation you received from the Conference Centre.

 Read the letter and fax below, which gives details of the conference.

 Then, using all information from the fax, write your letter to John Smith at the Nuffield Conference Centre, explaining the changes to the arrangements.  Do not include postal addresses.

 Write 120-140 words on separate sheet.

Today your Production Manager has sent you the fax below with changes he would like to make to the conference arrangements

注意：1 不要跑题

2 适当发挥

3 目标读者

4 不要抄袭

第三讲 商务便函与便条

审题：

Mr Smith, your boss, told you to ask Ms Liu to attend a sales presentation on a new product.

Write a note to Ms Liu:

*saying who wants her to attend the sales presentation;

*informing her when and where the sales presentation will be held

有同学写成Mr Smith told me to ask who wants to attend

有同学写成 Please write a note to Ms Liu asking her to attend a sales presentation. 一定要把题目看清楚，再下笔写。

（一）商务便函

一般公司企业往往都印有按照自己公司风格的商业便函，请看下列例子：

商务便函一般由以下几个部分组成：

1、Memo： Memo是Memorandum缩写，因此也可以用Memorandum，此外还有Internal Memorandum和Interoffice Memorandum，其意思都是一样的。

2、To：这一标题后面应写收信人的姓名与职衔，姓名前可以用尊称或不用，如：

To：Mr. John Smith，Sales Manager

3、From：这一标题后应写发信人的姓名与职衔：职衔可根据需要决定写或不写，但姓名前不要用尊称。

4、Date：日期的写法同书信里日期写法的要求完全一样，不要用数字来表示月份。

5、Subject：这一标题后是写事由的，即用一个或几个词汇简单概括便函的内容，以便查阅。事由必须简洁明了，不要用完整的句子，如：

Changes in Travel Advance Form

Promotion of Staff

Vacation Schedule

Participation in Training Programmes

（二）商务便条

商务便条一般有四个组成部分：日期、称呼、正文、签名。一些公司有印好的便条笺。如:

分类：

1 告知信息 inform

2 布置安排 arrange

3 征求意见 request

4 询问信息 enquire

5 求助申请 apply

6 推荐建议 suggest{bec中级写作范文}.

1 告知信息类

例题：

 You are a manager at an auditors called Golding & Co. Your company has just

merged with a competitor to become MasonGolding. You have been asked to inform staff of the change of name.

 Write a memo of 40 - 50 words:

* informing staff of the new name

* telling them when to start using the new name

* asking staff to use only the new name after that time.

收购与兼并 merger and aquisition

范文：

As a result of our merger with Mason&Co., the name of our company will be changed MasonGolding. Please start to use the new name on 1 March 2006. You are reminded that only the new name can be used from then on.

remind/ advise

例题

You are the training manager of a company which has won a large export order. You have been asked to organise foreign language training for some of your staff.

Write a memo to staff:

explaining why the courses are necessary

saying which members of staff should attend

announcing when the courses will start

Write 40-50 words on a separate sheet.

[范文]

To: All staff

From: the Training Manager

Date: 1 March 2005

Subject: A Foreign Language Training Course{bec中级写作范文}.

I was asked to organise a foreign language training course because of the large export order we received recently. It will start on 15 March and will last 2 weeks. Those who will deal with orders should attend this course.

2 布置安排类

 You are Head of Research for an international car manufacturer. You have to

make an urgent trip tomorrow to visit Pierre Blanco, a colleague who works for a subsidiary.

 Write a memo of 40-50 words to your secretary:

 telling her who you are going to see and when

 asking her to book flight tickets and accommodation

 telling her what work you would like her to do in your absence.

 Write on your Answer Sheet.

subsidiary, parent company, holding company, affiliate, branch, headquarters, representative office

范文：

I need to have an urgent meeting with Pierre Blanco of our Paris office tomorrow.

bec中级写作范文篇四

商务英语BEC中级写作范例(1)

海报是贴在人来人往的地方，告知广大群众大多是喜闻乐见的消息，如电影消息、球讯、商品报道等等，其性质类似广告，有的还配以绘画以增加吸引力。

有关球赛的海报

POSTER

Football Match

All Are Warmly Welcome

Under the auspices of the Student Union of our university, a friendly football match will be held between our team and the team of Chemical Engineering College on our football field on Saturday, May. 27th, 2000 at 5:00 p. m.

The Student Union

Thursday, May. 25.

足球赛

由本校学生会主办的足球友谊赛将于2000年5月27日(星期六)下午5时在足球场举行，参赛队为我校队与化工学院校队。欢迎届时观战。

校学生会

5月25日(星期四)

商品大拍卖海报

GOOD NEWS

Summer Clearance Sales

All the goods on show are sold at twenty percent discount. Please examine and choose them carefully before you pay. There will be no replacement or refunding. You have been warned in advance. You are welcome to make your choice. Personal Shopping Service

好消息

夏季清仓物资处理

本店陈列商品一律八折出售。请顾客们仔细看货，认真挑选。商品付款出门后不退不换，特此预先声明。如蒙惠顾，无比欢迎。

更多英语学习方法：企业英语培训

bec中级写作范文篇五

看范文学BEC中级写作

BEC考生练习写作时，看范文会不知道自己的问题在哪里，自己写的作文也不知道该如何改进，下面是两篇范文和详细的点评，说不定也能发现自己练习时的问题。

笔者上商务英语的课已经有些年头了。个人的体会是，商务英语课程以其务实、针对性强而受到学生的青睐，近年来报考的学生数明显大幅上升。当然要得高分也不易，尤其是作文部分，由于BEC写作和我们传统的作文考试题要求相差较大，学生比较难以适应。

本文通过对BEC中级考生文章的分析，给广大考生一点备考建议。

首先一点，我们必须牢记，归根结底，BEC作文考察的还是考生英语表达能力。所以学生并不需要担心自己缺乏这方面的实际经验是否会影响考场发挥。(顺便提一句，BEC高级对商务知识的要求大大提高，因此考生要在语言功底上苦下功夫。比如说，写商务报告的固定格式和用于必须牢记在心。)

与此同时，试题结合商务实战的特点，要求文章必须包含特定信息点，或者是通过提供信息源，以及考题中的标注，规定考生写作的具体范围和内容。所以审题是关键，所有已知条件都必须充分利用，换言之，如果遗漏已知条件，就会因信息表达不完整而导致失分。以下是对我的一名学员习文进行点评。

PART ONE

You have been informed that next Wednesday your company's computer system will be closed down so that improvements can be made.

Write an email to all staff in your department:

♦ saying what time on Wednesday the system will be closed down

♦ suggesting how staff should prepare for this

♦ saying how the system will be better after the improvements

Write 40--50 words

学生作文：

From: Jenny Xu

To: All Staff

Date: 5 April 2009

Subject: Computer System

I want to tell you that our Intranet based on Linux will be closed next Wednesday at 10 o’clock.. I want to suggesting that you should save all your important documents. The computer system will be faster because we will use a newer SAP system. The new system is according to ISO900 and we will benefit from that.

作文解析：

BEC作文解答时，审题非常重要。题目中给出的要求就好比是解代数题中已知条件，都要用到。小作文处理的时候，大家不妨可以把每一个已知条件扩写成一句句句子，同时兼顾句子之间的连接。

通常学生犯的错误是：

1. 漏掉题中给出的已知条件。

2. 给出的已知条件没有表达清楚，用词过于口语化，没有条理，暴露出语言功底薄弱。

3. 切忌过于花哨的发挥，多说多错。

这篇学生的作品是比较典型的案例。作者有一定的英语表达能力和工作经验，但文章中所暴露出来的不足也是明显的。写作不能从细处下笔，而是先要搭建框架。

以这篇习文为例，作者在具体语言的表达的雕琢上可圈可点，比如说第一个句子中based on引导的过去分词做后置定语，但是显而忘记了这篇文章的主要目的，那就是通知同事公司电脑系统要升级，但update这个词始终没有在文章中出现，因此读下来以后，可能同事还不是非常清楚，为什么computer system will be closed down, 尽管后面提到了improvement，总让人觉得有些如鲠在咽，言之不尽;因此，思路不清晰是这篇习文最大的问题。

此外，本文还有以下一些问题：

1. 有些用词过于口语化，比如说，文章开头, I want to tell you, 文中you should save这样的用语;

2. 建议Linux, 将SAP, ISO900等唬人术语统统除去，诚然BEC涉及到基本的商务知识，但是真正考核的还是语言功底，语用能力;商务知识好比是盖浇饭里面的小炒而已。

3.里面还有一个明显的语法错误，I want to suggesting„.，当然阅卷者不会刻意去搜寻语法错误，而是综合考量语法得分，但由于小作文篇幅较短，那么这个错误就显得非常明显。

范文：

Please be informed that our computer system will be closed next Wednesday at 12 o'clock for system upgrade. The closure will last for at least two hours. Make sure that you have saved all your documents before that time. The whole system will run on a new server, much faster than the current one.

PART TWO

You work for PJT Ltd, a manufacturing company. You need more staff in your department and your line manager has asked you to write a report explaining why.

Look at the information below, on which you have already made some handwritten notes.Then, using all your handwritten notes, write your report.

Write 120-140 words.

学生作文：

The purpose of this report is to explain why we need more staff in our department.

We compare the number of staff in our department between 2001 and 2003, it only increased five staff. But the average number of ordered units grow up from 200000 to 400000 between 2001 and 2003.

Our sales department has announced a big new order from an international company recently. It will bring us much more workload. And the annual holiday increased to 5 weeks per year. That means that we have more workload and less working days.

If we had more staff the order should be on time. We should save our company’s reputation. And the workflow will be improved.

作文解析：

BEC中级的大作文题型一般以写报告、书信为主，因此，这些必考问题的具体格式必须掌握。英文商务报告的格式有五个部分组成，其中包括报告的Subject, Introduction (This report aims/sets out to„„)，Findings (it was found that)， Conclusions(It was decided/agreed/felt that„„)， Recommendations (It is suggested that„..) 括号中是每段开头固定的表达方式，考生不宜自己去创造。同样写信也有格式化的表达方式，再此恕不展开。 和第一部分一样，大作文的写作审题是第一步，所有给出的已知条件必须用足。

本文中：

1.考生的习文字数恰当。但没有把报告应有的四个部分写完整，这将导致大量失分。在以上的习文中，考生表现出了不错的语言驾驭能力。

2.在审题上还有一些欠缺，比如 Another reason for more staff is that we will have fewer delays. 在题目中给出的已知条件中，有一份客户的投诉信件，应当作为佐证被引用，否则order should be on time无从谈起。{bec中级写作范文}.

3.除了没有按照报告的固定格式外，考生语言太随意。比如说，our sales department has announced a big new order，没有出处，而根据文章中给出的已知条件，这是公司Newsletter

所通告的，那么根据报告的要求，应该指出信息来源。

4.中国学生还普遍特别敏感的就是企业的信誉，因此经常会看到学生动辄就是喊口号的语言，比如说文中We should save our company’s reputation. 这样空洞无物的话应该避免。

5.还有就是细节处理，句子和段落之间连接忽略了。比如说，It will bring us much more workload. And the annual holiday increased to 5 weeks per year. 以及最后一句话And the workflow will be improved.其中的and 这个词用在这里显随意了些，可以考虑用Meanwhile 有“祸不单行”的意思。后面的And 应该删除。That means that we have more workload 这里两个that离的太近，可以考虑把后面一个去掉，同时时态应该是we will have。

范文：

Report on: More staff in our department

Date: 27.03.2004

Introduction

This report aims to explain why our department needs more staff.

Findings

Statistics show that there exists a big gap between the number of staff in our department and staff workload. While the number of ordered units grew up from only 200000 to 400000 in 2 years, the number of staff grew only by 5 people. According to the Staff Newsletter dated February 2004, we have won a big new order from an international company. That will bring us more work. At the same time, annual holiday has been increased to 5 weeks per year, meaning there won’t be enough staff for all the work. Our customer service department recently received a complaint from one of our clients about a tremendous delay in our delivery.

Conclusion

There are many reasons which explain the need of more staff. It is especially important for reducing the number of delays in delivery and to optimize the workflow.

Recommendations

More staff does not only mean more costs, it also means improved customer satisfaction.

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